Other Half
by Azuka on February 1, 2008
When she looked up from the book she was reading, her mouth opened wide in a soundless scream as she jumped to her feet. It seemed like just a moment had passed since she last checked on him, but her son was sitting in the street, completely oblivious to the large truck bearing down on him.
She sat rooted where she was, partly because of the shock, but also because she knew instinctively that she was unlikely to make it in time. All she could do now was pray.
The driver of the truck had not noticed the toddler. Soon, what used to be a human being would be crushed under his tires.
The boy tottered to his feet at the last moment and halted the truck. He simply reached out and stopped it as he would a toy. His deformed right hand seemed to grow, extending and shattering the windshield of the truck.
She watched in horror as he pulled screaming the driver out of cab and slammed him repeatedly on the blacktop until he stopped moving. That done, he turned away and began to walk towards his mother.
“Don’t come,” she said in a tone that was little more than a whisper.
He was grinning, the missing teeth in his mouth giving him a look that was both innocent and fiendish.
“You’re not my son,” she said aloud, not only to convince herself, but also to reason with the creature making its way towards her. She was sure he could at least understand her.
“Mama,” said her son. He appeared to be struggling, his face alternating between a grin and a look of pain.
She took a step back. He could kill her — he had needed no reason in the case of the driver.
“H-Help…” he said in one of the moments of pain.
“Who are you?” she asked, taking another step back.
“Dark Half,” her son said. His right hand twitched…
22 comments
Wow, that was some scarey shit…
like something Stephen King would come up with….
thinking of starting a series?
by Afrobabe on February 1, at 8:35 pm. #
I like, I like! Is this a product of the Inn?
You might want to review the sentence starting with ‘She watched in horror…’
by Idemili on February 2, at 8:25 am. #
Wow.. that was really scary Azuka – and oh no, ’tis my bedtime! Lol. You are responsible for any nightmares. On a serious note, this is really well-written and intriguing – love the twitching of the right hand at the end. More writing please! Also wanted to remind you that the odes carnival over on my blog is still on – the odes are wonderful so check them out, you’ll also get a chance to vote for your fave at the end of the week.
by DG on February 5, at 4:22 pm. #
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dark half….ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
by Pammy on February 6, at 11:04 am. #
very interesting.. then what happens?
by pixgremlin on February 7, at 4:51 pm. #
ooohhhhhhhh
this is like some Damien stuff right here
quite grim
azuka… what else is lurking in there?
by DiAmOnD hawk on February 7, at 10:27 pm. #
Interesting … I like the last line.
by Noni.Moss on February 8, at 6:48 am. #
wow!u do write well
by pink-satin on February 9, at 12:14 pm. #
Good writing.
by in my head and around me on February 10, at 5:32 am. #
Holy Jesus, thatz very scary.
Azuka where did you get that story?
by Oracle on February 12, at 5:52 pm. #
SCAAAAARRRRYYYYY
UPDATE!
Happy Valentine Azuka.
by Queen Ebong on February 13, at 8:17 pm. #
I see…a scene from a horror movie…right?!
by princesa on February 14, at 7:53 am. #
hey Azuka
Keshi.
by Keshi on February 17, at 8:25 pm. #
Scary but good…I dont like horror…soooooo
by uzo on February 22, at 12:41 pm. #
hmmmm…lol.
by Jaycee on February 24, at 10:40 pm. #
Azuka, you really should write a book you know!
by nyemoni on February 27, at 4:17 am. #
i was seriously wondering when u were going to be back! hope u are ok
by Jem on March 14, at 9:45 pm. #
Azuka..!!!
Did you miss me? Of course, you did. Admit it already jo
by Vera Ezimora on March 17, at 3:16 am. #
When are you finishing the story?
by ablackjamesbond on March 18, at 12:03 pm. #
Continue please! That was scary, but well written.
by Favoured Girl on April 12, at 4:47 pm. #
One word…WOW!!!
by Nike on June 13, at 6:38 am. #
*scratching chin thoughtfully* Like Afro said, this really reminded me of Stephen King’s “Pet Sematary”. Somethign about the child, the truck, the helpless parent and then the child not really being “the” child…hmm
by TheIceQueen on September 16, at 7:04 am. #