Other Half
February 1st, 2008When she looked up from the book she was reading, her mouth opened wide in a soundless scream as she jumped to her feet. It seemed like just a moment had passed since she last checked on him, but her son was sitting in the street, completely oblivious to the large truck bearing down on him.
She sat rooted where she was, partly because of the shock, but also because she knew instinctively that she was unlikely to make it in time. All she could do now was pray.
The driver of the truck had not noticed the toddler. Soon, what used to be a human being would be crushed under his tires.
The boy tottered to his feet at the last moment and halted the truck. He simply reached out and stopped it as he would a toy. His deformed right hand seemed to grow, extending and shattering the windshield of the truck.
She watched in horror as he pulled screaming the driver out of cab and slammed him repeatedly on the blacktop until he stopped moving. That done, he turned away and began to walk towards his mother.
“Don’t come,” she said in a tone that was little more than a whisper.
He was grinning, the missing teeth in his mouth giving him a look that was both innocent and fiendish.
“You’re not my son,” she said aloud, not only to convince herself, but also to reason with the creature making its way towards her. She was sure he could at least understand her.
“Mama,” said her son. He appeared to be struggling, his face alternating between a grin and a look of pain.
She took a step back. He could kill her — he had needed no reason in the case of the driver.
“H-Help…” he said in one of the moments of pain.
“Who are you?” she asked, taking another step back.
“Dark Half,” her son said. His right hand twitched…
February 1st, 2008 at 8:35 pm
Wow, that was some scarey shit…
like something Stephen King would come up with….
thinking of starting a series?
February 2nd, 2008 at 8:25 am
I like, I like! Is this a product of the Inn?
You might want to review the sentence starting with ‘She watched in horror…’
February 5th, 2008 at 4:22 pm
Wow.. that was really scary Azuka - and oh no, ’tis my bedtime! Lol. You are responsible for any nightmares. On a serious note, this is really well-written and intriguing - love the twitching of the right hand at the end. More writing please! Also wanted to remind you that the odes carnival over on my blog is still on - the odes are wonderful so check them out, you’ll also get a chance to vote for your fave at the end of the week.
February 6th, 2008 at 11:04 am
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dark half….ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
February 7th, 2008 at 4:51 pm
very interesting.. then what happens?
February 7th, 2008 at 10:27 pm
ooohhhhhhhh
this is like some Damien stuff right here
quite grim
azuka… what else is lurking in there?
February 8th, 2008 at 6:48 am
Interesting … I like the last line.
February 9th, 2008 at 12:14 pm
wow!u do write well
February 10th, 2008 at 5:32 am
Good writing.
February 12th, 2008 at 5:52 pm
Holy Jesus, thatz very scary.
Azuka where did you get that story?
February 13th, 2008 at 8:17 pm
SCAAAAARRRRYYYYY
UPDATE!
Happy Valentine Azuka.
February 14th, 2008 at 7:53 am
I see…a scene from a horror movie…right?!
February 17th, 2008 at 8:25 pm
hey Azuka
Keshi.
February 22nd, 2008 at 12:41 pm
Scary but good…I dont like horror…soooooo
February 24th, 2008 at 10:40 pm
hmmmm…lol.
February 27th, 2008 at 4:17 am
Azuka, you really should write a book you know!
March 14th, 2008 at 9:45 pm
i was seriously wondering when u were going to be back! hope u are ok
March 17th, 2008 at 3:16 am
Azuka..!!!
Did you miss me? Of course, you did. Admit it already jo
March 18th, 2008 at 12:03 pm
When are you finishing the story?
April 12th, 2008 at 4:47 pm
Continue please! That was scary, but well written.
June 13th, 2008 at 6:38 am
One word…WOW!!!